1. Uh-Huh
    March 13, 2014 @ 9:22 pm

    Because when people recount stories, particularly emotional ones, they always use vague titles for their closest family members. “My Dad” is way more likely as just “Dad”. Never “My Dad” – unless the father is not present then it’s likely they’re setting up roles and context at the start of a story “Me and my Dad were…” My Dad and I…” etc. “My Son” is utterly implausible. “Billy”* with a “Name changed by request” will give you more credibility in a situation like this. Read some Ray Carver for how people actually talk. Or better yet go listen to people talk crap in a food court if you want verisimilitude for your characters. A photo of a weird hole in a wall in an attic – easy enough to find – would have also done a lot to sell this better.

    You have a knack for a good campfire tale, mate. But why does it need to be more than that? There are no monsters in the attic but – maybe – human ones; but IF there were you’d call the cops and animal control – not email a “paranormal” website. We’re too far along in history to settle for anonymous sources who use the same narrative voice; and without color; despite the emotive content of the story. If you write fiction be prepared for criticism: I give you a C- and a “nice try”.


    • Ashley
      March 16, 2014 @ 4:49 am

      Well then, if IT IS some attic monster or demon then cameras don’t lie, right? 🙂


      • Andrea
        April 6, 2017 @ 10:32 am

        I think it’s real cuz me and my friend were on the. Bleachers in the gym and our thumbs went threw the cracks my friends thumb was scratched and we were looking to see if someone was there but nothing. So I thought it was a prank and so my other 2 friends thought it was fake too but when we went back to prove it was real me and my friend put our fingers in *same two people as last time* we felt a scratch on our hands so I get up look under the bleachers and nothing was there but all I could fell was long sharp fingers moybe like 15 fingers ! My other friend still don’t think I was real but all I know is that it hapend!


  2. Ashley
    March 13, 2014 @ 9:48 pm

    Creepy! Maybe it was some kind of animal with rabies? If the story is true, I’d definitely put a camera up there and maybe catch it on film!


    • Deadeye
      March 13, 2014 @ 11:10 pm

      Ashley There are a few holes in your theory. A; If it was a critter with rabies it wouldn’t be in nobody’s attic. I’d come more closer to saying that this thing was a demonic spirit who allowed himself to be seen by both father and son


  3. Arcturus
    March 13, 2014 @ 11:41 pm

    Too casual a response from the alleged witnesses for this to be real. They’re just goofing.


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